Dissertation editors are like plumbers

Or electricians or appliance or furnace repair technicians…

Prepare for a mini rant. When I was at the end of writing my dissertation I was a complete noodle. Emotionally. Intellectually. Physically. Financially. I know what a doctoral program costs. In addition to the actual costs of books and tuition there are the opportunity costs. Maybe you have to take time off work or can’t work as many hours because you’re working on your, say it with me now, “damn dissertation.” And there are costs involved in doing practicums. (I did two consulting practicums in Kiev, Ukraine and probably could have found something closer to home but wouldn’t have missed those experiences for the world.)

How we estimate editing costs

Back to my point. You’ve finished your proposal or completed your research and turned in all five chapters and your chair/advisor suggests you get an editor or you decide yourself you’d like an editor to go over it one last time. In my experience, if an advisor/chair suggests an editor, you need one! So you contact someone like me or another academic editor and ask for an estimate. Editors are different but here’s what I do/say: Send me your proposal or dissertation complete with references and appendices and I’ll edit a couple pages to tell you what it will cost and how long it will take. I also say that I track my time in 15-minute increments and will charge less if it takes less time than I think…but it won’t cost more if it takes more time than I estimated.

Costs are not-negotiable

Sounds pretty straightforward doesn’t it? Apparently not to some people. Here’s an email thread from a recent estimate:

Doctoral candidate: My name is ____________ and I am a doctoral student at ___________. My dissertation is 63 pages long and has mostly been edited by my chair and committee members. I have been given the go ahead to have final editing completed for submission to proqwest. I am wondering if you can provide me with information about your services, including an estimate of cost and how long it might take.

My response to the original query: Hi _________. I reviewed your dissertation and edited a few sample pages. I estimate it would cost about $350. I track my time in 15 minute increments so if it doesn’t take me as long as I think that’s all I charge you for. But I don’t charge if I go over the estimate. I would like a week to complete the editing. Let me know!

Doctoral candidate: I was hoping not to spend more than $250.00 as I am on a budget, being a poor college student. Dr. _____, the director of the program, has asked us to provide him with the edits to review once our editor has finished. He would like to create his own list of dissertation editors for the program.

My response: I hear you about finances (having recently completed my doctorate) but know that my rates are reasonable. As I mentioned I do keep track of my time but feel the amount I quoted you is pretty accurate. Believe me I will not be hurt if you go with someone else. I get a lot of referrals from professors at _____ who are familiar with my work and think I will continue to do so. Best of luck to you!

Doctoral candidate: I didn’t mean to offend you and did not mean to imply that your rates were not reasonable. I am sure your work is very good and that you receive a lot of referrals from _________. I was simply stating that I was “hoping to keep the cost around $250, because that is all of the money I can afford at this point.” I suppose I should have followed that statement with would you take a payment arrangement for the additional $100. I suppose I was waiting for you to provide me with options you might be willing to work out versus being direct and asking. So this is good learning lesson.

My response: Thanks for the explanation. I am not comfortable negotiating my rate or the payment terms (within 7 days of emailing file) — makes it seem a little too commoditized (a word?) for me. Maybe ______ writing center could help?

Why dissertation editors are like plumbers

When the water won’t go down in your tub (or comes up in your toilet—yuck) you call a plumber and are told that the service call is $85.00 plus so much for every ¼ hour and parts and whatever. Same with an appliance or furnace repair person or electrician. And heaven forbid you need someone outside of regular business hours which of course you always do. If you don’t like what they charge you can move on to someone else. It’s all up front – no negotiating.

If someone doesn’t like what I charge or my payment terms or want to work with me, that’s their business. But I don’t think they should try to negotiate rates or say they’ll refer me if I give them a deal. Or, as one person suggested, “If you charge less for the proposal I’ll give you my entire dissertation.” They wouldn’t do it with a plumber…or maybe they would!

By the way…it wouldn’t normally be $350 for 63 pages but I could tell from editing just a few pages that this dissertation would require a boatload of editing. I mean, who spells “phenomenological” incorrectly in the title? Not a good sign.

Dr. Kat

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If I’ve told you once I’ve told you a thousand times — skip the hyperbole

And adverbs and adjectives for that matter

You know all those things that make magazine articles and books and online content and virtually everything else you read interesting? Similes, analogies, metaphors, hyperbole, and my personal favorite, onomatopoeia? And what about plain old adjectives and adverbs? With dissertation writing, “fuggetaboutit.” Let’s take them one at a time.

Analogies. Example from the movie Forrest Gump. “Life was like a box of chocolates. You never know what you’re gonna get.” Oxford Dictionaries (oxforddictionaries.com) defines an analogy as “A comparison between two things, typically for the purpose of explanation or clarification.”

Well, then, I guess analogies have no place in dissertations because you shouldn’t need them. The writing has to be clear enough that there is no need for further explanation or clarification. The only kind of comparison might be a causal comparative methodology (research that attempts to identify a cause-effect relationship between two or more groups). So the difference between an analogy and the causal comparative study is that analogies explain or clarify and causal comparative studies identify cause-effect relationships.

Hyperbole. The title of this dissertation tip is a good/spectacular/fabulous/stupendous example of hyperbole:  If I’ve told you once, I’ve told you a thousand times, skip the hyperbole. Thefreedictionary.com defines hyperbole as “a figure of speech in which exaggeration is used for emphasis or effect, as in I could sleep for a year or This book weighs a ton.”

With dissertations, exaggeration or overstating could land you in a heap of trouble. Even the use of the words “good,” or “interesting,” or “unfortunately” could be seen as editorializing. All readers are different and bring their own experiences to the table. Just the facts, please.

Metaphors. Example from ereadingworksheets.com. “I was lost in a sea of nameless faces.” Yourdictionary.com defines metaphors as “a figure of speech containing an implied comparison, in which a word or phrase ordinarily and primarily used of one thing is applied to another.”

Yes, the use of metaphors and other colorful writing techniques would make dissertations more readable, but whoever said that was the purpose of dissertations. No one wants to read a dissertation. I keep a bound copy of my dissertation (a real page-turner) on the bedside table in our guest room. Guests wouldn’t get through the title page (The Combination of Five Factors That Lead to Women Leaders’ Decision to Opt Out of Their Senior Leadership Position) before nodding off.

Onomatopoeia. I had a nun who taught English in the high school I attended who loved to point out uses of onomatopoeia. I was always just grateful that I could finally pronounce it. ˌänəˌmadəˈpēə, änəˌmädəˈpēə/ Wikipedia.com defines it as “a word that phonetically imitates, resembles or suggests the source of the sound that it describes.” Examples are cuckoo, sizzle, sprinkle, squirt, drip, drizzle. Yourdictionary.com has great examples of onomatopoeia related to voice: giggle, growl, grunt, gurgle, mumble, murmur, bawl, belch, chatter, blurt.

Unfortunately (another word you can’t use in a dissertation), as much as you’d like to make your dissertation content “sizzle,” don’t give in to the temptation.

Adverbs and Adjectives – even these are a no-no. There’s a great article by William Noble “Don’t Use Adverbs and Adjectives to Prettify Your Prose” (http://www.writersdigest.com/writing-articles/by-writing-goal/write-first-chapter-get-started/nobles-writing-blunders-excerpt, August, 2008) that says that good authors and clear writing don’t need adverbs or adjectives. Noble says that’s usually a mistake that inexperienced writers make. Most of the time both are redundant.

One really well done dissertation I worked on about “wounded warriors” going back to school used this phrase: …The moral imperative academe has to study a neglected group which has [profoundly] sacrificed itself for this country.” I suggested deleting the word “profoundly” because it seemed like editorializing and wasn’t necessary. The content itself made this a powerful statement.

Let’s step back and define each. I know, you shouldn’t be at this stage and need a definition of either but there you have it. I have a master’s in journalism and years of editing experience and I get mixed up. So here goes: An adverb often ends in “ly.” Noble uses these two examples: The stone sank quickly…The fire truck bell clanged loudly… and goes on to say, “how else would a stone sink but quickly?” and “how else would a fire truck bell clang but loudly?”

Mark Twain said: “As to the Adjective: when in doubt, strike it out.” Twain is also quoted as saying: “When you catch an adjective, kill it. No, I don’t mean utterly, but kill most of them–then the rest will be valuable. They weaken when they are close together. They give strength when they are far apart.” And, “A man’s character may be learned from the adjectives which he habitually uses in conversation.”

In “Cluttered writing: adjectives and adverbs in academia” Rutgers public policy professor Adam Okulicz-Kozaryn counts adjectives and adverbs in some samples of scientific writing and concludes that “social science” writing uses about 15 percent more adjectives and adverbs than “natural science” writing. He then wonders, “Is there a reason that a social scientist cannot write as clearly as a natural scientist?” (http://www.slate.com) I think this is a rhetorical question but that’s a blog for another day.

The title of Richard Compton’s dissertation (http://linguistlist.org/pubs/diss/browse-diss-action.cfm?DissID=38022) was: “The Syntax and Semantics of Modification in Inuktitut: Adjectives and adverbs in a polysynthetic language.” Apparently Inuits don’t use adverbs or adjectives. I think we might be able to learn something from them. While this dissertation topic is pretty deep (I couldn’t really understand the abstract) it does point out that adverbs and adjectives may be superfluous to a centuries-old group. I’m just saying…

Dr. Kat

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Creating a good dissertation title

Why Good Dissertation Titles are Like Making Love…

The advertising giant, David Ogilvy who was known for promoting the use of long copy in advertising, used to say that long copy was like making love, as long as you have something to offer, keep going. His philosophy was that people who are interested in a product or service crave information. Or as he put it, you can use short, clever copy to sell a candy bar but the audience for a Cessna Citation will want to know more, a lot more.

Although many people think advertising is about as far away from academia as it’s possible to get, advertisers spend billions of dollars a year coming up with the perfect headlines for their print and online advertising. That should count for something. Use these tips from the advertising world to come up with the perfect headline (I mean title) for your dissertation.

Allow for alliteration. Everybody knows what alliteration is. The most common uses of alliteration from our childhoods are
Peter Piper picked a peck of pickled peppers” and “She sells seashells by the seashore,” although I think the second one was an example of a tongue twister not alliteration.

Literarydevices.com defines alliteration as the “repetition of the same consonant sounds at the beginning of words that are in close proximity to each other. This repetition of sounds brings attention to the lines in which it is used, and creates more aural rhythm.” I’m not sure what “aural rhythm” is but Literarydevices.com points out that writers from Beowolf to Shakespeare used alliteration to create it, aural rhythm that is.

Advertising has long used alliteration in headlines. A Journal of Advertising article, “The Use of Figures of Speech in Ad Headlines” by James H. Leigh (http://connection.ebscohost.com/c/articles/9408152593/use-figures-speech-print-ad-headlines) provided an analysis of 2183 print ad headlines and found that figures of speech, including alliteration, are used in many if not most of the ad headlines.

  • EXAMPLE: Problems With Partnerships at Work: Lessons From an Irish Case Study

Assonance assists in readership. We loved that the nuns let us use this word at St. Stanislaus Catholic School when I was growing up. What rebels!  Also from Literarydevices.com, assonance “refers to the repetition of vowel sounds in close proximity.” Yourdictionary.com says that “Assonance examples are sometimes hard to find, because they work subconsciously sometimes, and are subtle. The long vowel sounds will slow down the energy and make the mood more somber, while high sounds can increase the energy level of the piece.” Hmmm…increasing the energy level of a dissertation – not gonna go there.

  • EXAMPLE: “I lie down by the side of my bride”/”Fleet feet sweep by sleeping geese”/”Hear the lark and harden to the barking of the dark fox gone to ground” by Pink Floyd. (Dictionary.com).

Oops, here’s a relevant example of assonance: The Affect of Mobile Performance Support Devices on Anxiety and
Self-Efficacy of Hospital Float Staff

Consider consonance as a literary device. Here’s a fun example from dictionary.com. “A skunk sat on a stump. The stump thought the skunk stunk. The skunk thought the stump stunk. What stunk, the skunk or the stump?” Consonance refers to the “repetition of consonant sounds in close proximity.” It sounds like alliteration, sort of, but the difference is that consonance doesn’t have to be at the beginning of the word; it can be at the beginning, middle, or end. That makes alliteration a type of consonance except it’s only the beginning of the word or stressed syllable. (TMI? Nodding off?)

  • EXAMPLE: Consequences of the Psychological Contract for the Employment Relationship: A Large Scale Survey (the hard “c” in consequences, psychological, and contract)

Bigger is better. In advertising, the headline is often used to make big claims (new, improved, better, faster, cheaper, easier). In dissertation titles, bigger can mean a large scale survey or meta-analysis or simply a big idea.

  • Example: Eyes Open Wide: Thinking About Race and Broadening Perception to Combat Racism by Louis John Camilleri (sometimes bigger means a big concept…In this case, changing thinking about race to combat racism)

Use colorful words. In advertising, words are used to create a mood, to create an image, to initiate action. That action in dissertations translates to someone sourcing or reading your dissertation. The more colorful words you can use in your title the more citations you’ll get. Some words are more colorful than others. The example uses the words “dynamic” and “conflict” to create interest. The author could have chosen “changing” instead of dynamic which isn’t as strong or “discord” for conflict. Go to thesaurus.com to search for more colorful words for your title. (But not too colorful; it is a dissertation after all.)

  • EXAMPLE: The dynamic nature of conflict: A longitudinal study of intragroup conflict and group performance

Use the shortest words possible. There’s something about dissertations and dissertation titles that brings out the verbosity (verboseness?) in people. Advertising headlines often use the ERF (Easy Reading Formula) to ensure concise headlines. Here’s how ERF works: You assign a point for every consonant and try to keep it to as few points as possible. Try it. It’s kind of fun to shave points. That means “utilizing” gets four points and “using” gets two points. That means you can save your points for point-suckers like “phenomenological.”

  • EXAMPLE: Analysis of Leadership Perceptions Using Multi-rater Feedback (notice “using” instead of “utilizing although the author could have substituted “leader” for “leadership” saving two more points…I’m just saying).

Play to your strengths. If you tie two things together that nobody expects to tie together, go for it. Look at your topic and using the example below, you wouldn’t expect to see “musical responses” and AIDS together.

  • Example: Musical Responses to AIDS: Meaning and Signification in Two Works for Solo Piano by Robert Savage and Kevin Oldham. (Note: The author could have used “significance” instead of “signification and saved one whole point.)

You don’t have to start with the title or headline. Sometimes the headline emerges from the scintillating body copy or a subhead works better as a head. Start with a working title and go from there. Lots of times the working title turns out to be the best title anyway. So if someone says, “What’s your dissertation about?” you tell them what it’s about and that ends up being your title.

  • EXAMPLE (from my own dissertation): Working title: Why women leaders opt out. Final title: The Combination of Five Factors That Lead to Women Leaders’ Decision to Opt Out of Their Senior Leadership Position (Note: I was able to add the “combination of five factors” after I completed my research. The “opt out of their senior leadership position” clarified that they weren’t retiring, only leaving their positions.)

Look at buzz words and trending terms. Copywriters in the advertising world are always aware of the latest buzzwords and trends. I started my career in advertising and marketing (after earning a master’s in Journalism I immediately sold out to the highest bidder!), and every year my girlfriend and I decide which buzzwords we’re not going to use that year. One year it was “leverage,” another was “traction,” and there’s the all-time favorite “24/7.”

  • EXAMPLE: Mentoring Women Faculty: An Instrumental Case Study of Strategic Collaboration (strategic collaboration is about as timely as it gets and mentoring is resurfacing as an industry trend, too).

Go global. Like real estate, dissertation titles are often about location, location, location. If your dissertation has an international component, use it in the title.

  • EXAMPLE: Barriers to Internet banking adoption: A qualitative study among corporate customers in Thailand.

Target your audience. The example dissertation title is a narrow enough title that it identifies the target audience by topic “networking” and “marketing strategy” and size “small community businesses.” You could also target your audience by geography, methodology, timing (longitudinal), gender, or myriad other target marketing options. (Notice the use of “myriad” as an adjective. It is never “a myriad of.” One dissertation chair kept changing it on a dissertation I edited and was getting increasingly salty about her comments about how the “editor” was ignoring her changes. I finally sent my client the rule on the use of the word “myriad” to pass along. Never got an apology for the salty comments.)

  • EXAMPLE: Networking as marketing strategy: A case study of small community businesses.
  • EXAMPLE: Substance and Mediation: Towards a Critical Hylomorphism of Media. (Since no one knows what “hylomorphism” means – Metaphysical theory that studies being as substance of matter and form…not sure what that means either, the use of the word in the title really, really narrows the target audience.)

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Writing the dissertation abstract — key words are key

Select. Index. Repeat.

While the main purpose behind keywords is for selection, the other purpose of the abstract and keywords is for indexing. Since most article databases in online catalogs let you search abstracts, keywords make quick work of the search function by eliminating full-text searches for articles that don’t apply.

Tips for Choosing Effective Keywords

  • Use the words you used when searching articles for your literature review.
  • Tie your keywords to your title and topic. If your title is “Why Senior Women Leaders Opt Out” that pretty much sets your keywords.
  • Use your headings to determine keywords. Dissertations in APA style use five levels of headings. Look at your level 2 headings to determine keywords.
  • Follow APA or your school’s guidelines for use of keywords. Most of the time you’ll choose five or six keywords. Some schools and most peer-reviewed publications have specific guidelines for the number and type of keywords used. Some publications even provide a list of preferred terms or keywords, what they often refer to as a common vocabulary.
  • Consider your target audience. Most people who will search for terms used in your dissertation will be in your field. Include terms specific to your field while at the same time expanding your keywords to include people who may be interested in your methodology or another aspect of your dissertation.
  • Avoid acronyms or jargon. This should go without saying but sometimes when you get to the dissertation stage your focus gets so narrow that you think everyone will be in the same place you are in terms of interest and experience.
  • Use key phrases not just keywords. And use synonyms for the key phrases. (For my dissertation I looked at women leaders and women executives.)
  • Go back to articles you referenced in your literature review and check what keywords they used in their abstracts.
  • Think globally. Some terms may differ in the international market. Grades in the United States may be referred to as “forms” in the UK.
  • Include all variations of a keyword. For my dissertation (naturally) I included opt-out, opting out, opt out without a hyphen. For this article I’d use keywords and key words.

Formatting keywords

Like all things to do with the dissertation, APA even has guidelines for formatting keywords. These keywords go at the bottom of the abstract (which, of course, has its own set of formatting rules).

  • Two spaces (one double space) after the last sentence in the abstract, type the word “Keywords” in italics followed by a colon. Place it flush left, no indent.
  • Using lowercase letters type in the keywords followed by commas BUT without using a comma at the end.

Example (from my own dissertation on why senior women leaders opt out – much longer title but that’s all we have room for here):

Keywords: leadership, women leaders, opt-out, glass ceiling, positivistic case study


Search Engine Optimization (SEO)

Keywords and SEO are joined at the hip. Virtually every virtual site uses SEO to make sure people find and visit their site. The keywords you choose will determine how many people find and read your dissertation. Since most searchers don’t look past the first page of the search results, you can see why choosing the correct keywords is so important.

Network Solutions (http://www.networksolutions.com/education/choosing-seo-keywords/) says there are four factors to keep in mind when choosing keywords: keyword volume, keyword relevance, keyword competition, and keyword focus.

Keyword volume: All this means is how often you use the term in your dissertation. So you go to “Find,” type in the word and you’ll see a list of how many times it appears. If in doubt go for volume. The downside is that generic terms get the most searches so you’ll end up on page 250 if you don’t choose carefully.

Example: With my dissertation there would be a billion cites with “leadership” as a keyword but many fewer sites with women leaders opt-out.

Keyword relevance: Keywords have to be real. That means you have to use keywords that truly describe what people will find in your dissertation. APA doesn’t like superlatives or even adjectives (or anthropomorphizing for that matter) so you can’t exaggerate findings or expand on the topic to get more people interested in your work.

Example: Again, with my dissertation being about women leaders opting out, it would be misleading to piggyback on Sheryl Sandberg’s book, Lean In (which by the way came out after my dissertation and my easy-to-read dissertation wasn’t exactly flying off the shelves).

Keyword competition: All you have to do to check the competition for your keyword is to do a simple search for that one word. The more results for the word the less likely people are to find your dissertation.

Example: While my dissertation (enough already with your dissertation!) was about women leaders opting out, it was also a positivistic case study which isn’t a methodology normally associated with this topic.

Keyword focus: Narrowing the focus by expanding the keyword phrase helps get your dissertation out there.

Example: Naturally, again using my own dissertation, I found 94,000,000 sites using opt-out and only 62,000,000 using women opt-out, and only 3,810,000 for women leaders opt out. You can see where this is going, right?

Dr. Kat

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Transitioning through literature reviews

Good Transitions. Bad Transitions. No Transitions.

One of the biggest complaints of dissertation chairs and committees (and academic editors!) is sloppy and choppy and even non-existent transitions. You know what I’m talking about. You are intent on hammering out your lit review and you plop those paragraphs in there under the topic or subtopic and you’re done. Not so fast. The good news is that literature review transitions is as easy as connecting the dots.

Transitions are an integral part of structure. Bethel University in Minnesota used this graduated scale for evaluating the structure of doctoral dissertations.

  1. Structure: The overall structure of the document is well developed.
  2. The document lacks any real structure. It does not follow guidelines set forth in the assignment.
  3. The document’s structure is inconsistent. It is unclear and often moves from point to point without any transitions.
  4. The structure of the document is generally good. For the most part it has clear headings, transitions, and meets requirements. Yet there are some areas that lack this clarity.
  5. The structure of the document is excellent. The headings, transitions, and required areas flow well. All areas of the document support one another.


drgwen.org tutorials. http: //www.drgwen.com/materials/apa/transitions.htm

I like this one. Transitions are about relationships and this list shows the relationship and gives some words to use to make smooth transitions. Pick one from each column.

Addition also, besides, furthermore, in addition, moreover, again
Consequence accordingly, as a result, consequently, hence, otherwise, so then, therefore, thus, thereupon
Summarizing after all, all in all, all things considered, briefly, by and large, in any case, in any event, in brief, in conclusion, on the whole, in short in summary, in the final analysis, in the long run, on balance, on the whole, to sum up, to summarize, finally
Generalizing as a rule, as usual, for the most part, generally, generally speaking, ­ordinarily, usually
Restatement in essence, in other words, namely, that is, that is to say, in short, in brief, to put it differently
Contrast and Comparison contrast, by the same token, conversely, instead, likewise, on one hand, on the contrary, on the other hand, rather, similarly, yet, but, however, still, nevertheless, in contrast
Sequence at first, first of all, to begin with, in the first place, at the same time, for now, for the time being, the next step, in time, in turn, later on, meanwhile, next, then, soon, the meantime, later, while, earlier, simultaneously, afterward, in conclusion
Diversion by the way, incidentally
Illustration for example, for instance, for one thing
Similarity likewise, similar, moreover
Direction here, there, over there, beyond, nearly, opposite, under, above, to the left, to the right, in the distance

Source:  http: //www.drgwen.com/materials/apa/transitions.htm


Purdue Owl. https: //owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/574/01/

This is my go-to source for all things APA. The transitions page is especially good because it shows befores and afters (bad transitions and good transitions or example and revision). Contributors are Ryan Weber and Karl Stolley. Here are some examples and revisions.

Example:  Overall, Management Systems International has logged increased sales in every sector, leading to a significant rise in third-quarter profits.

Another important thing to note is that the corporation had expanded its international influence.

Revision:  Overall, Management Systems International has logged increased sales in every sector, leading to a significant rise in third-quarter profits.

These impressive profits are largely due to the corporation’s expanded international influence.

Example:  Fearing for the loss of Danish lands, Christian IV signed the Treaty of Lubeck, effectively ending the Danish phase of the 30 Years War.

But then something else significant happened. The Swedish intervention began.

Revision:  Fearing for the loss of more Danish lands, Christian IV signed the Treaty of Lubeck, effectively ending the Danish phase of the 30 Years War.

Shortly after Danish forces withdrew, the Swedish intervention began.

Example:  Amy Tan became a famous author after her novel, The Joy Luck Club, skyrocketed up the bestseller list.

There are other things to note about Tan as well. Amy Tan also participates in the satirical garage band the Rock Bottom Remainders with Stephen King and Dave Barry.

Revision:  Amy Tan became a famous author after her novel, The Joy Luck Club, skyrocketed up the bestseller list.

Though her fiction is well known, her work with the satirical garage band the Rock Bottom Remainders receives far less publicity.


Fresno State:  http: //libguides.csufresno.edu/content.php?pid=24538&sid=177093

These guidelines make it even simpler because it narrows it down to four types of transitions:

  1. Additive: addition, introduction, similarity to other ideas
  • Addition: indeed, further, as well (as this), either (neither), not only (this) but also, (that) as well, also,  moreover, what is more, as a matter of fact, and, furthermore, in addition (to this), besides (this),  to tell you the truth, or, in fact, actually, to say nothing of, too,  let alone, much less,  additionally, nor, alternatively, on the other hand, not to mention (this)
  • Introduction: such as, as, particularly, including, as an illustration, for example, like, in particular, for one thing,  to illustrate, for instance, especially, notably, by way of example
  • Reference: speaking about (this), considering (this), regarding (this), with regards to (this),  as for (this), concerning (this), on the subject of (this), the fact that
  • Similarity: similarly,  in the same way, by the same token,  in a like manner, equally,  likewise
  • Identification: that is (to say), namely, specifically, thus,
  • Clarification: that is (to say), I mean, (to) put (it) another way,   in other words
  1. Adversative: signal conflict, contradiction
  • Conflict: but, by way of contrast, while, on the other hand, however, (and) yet, whereas, though (final position), in contrast,  when in fact, conversely,   still
  • Emphasis: even more, above all,  indeed,   more importantly,   besides
  • Concession: but even so, nevertheless, even though, on the other hand, admittedly, however,  nonetheless, despite (this), notwithstanding (this), albeit, (and) still, although, in spite of (this),  regardless (of this), (and) yet, though, granted (this), be that as it may,
  • Dismissal: either way, whichever happens, in either event, in any case, at any rate, in either case, whatever happens, all the same, in any event,
  • Replacement: (or) at least, (or) rather, instead
  1. Causal: signal cause/effect and reason/result
  • Cause/Reason: for the (simple) reason that, being that, for, in view of (the fact), inasmuch as, because (of the fact), seeing that, as, owing to (the fact), due to (the fact that), in that since,  forasmuch as
  • Condition: on (the) condition (that),  granted (that),  if,  provided that,  in case,  in the event that,  as/so long as,  unless, given that,  granting (that),  providing that,  even if,  only if
  • Effect/Result: as a result (of this), consequently, hence, for this reason, thus, because (of this),  in consequence, so that, accordingly, as a consequence, so much (so) that, so,   therefore,
  • Purpose: for the purpose of, in the hope that, for fear that, so that, with this intention, to the end that, in order to, lest, with this in mind, in order that, so as to, so
  • Consequence: under those circumstances, then, in that case, if not, that being the case,  if so,   otherwise
  1. Sequential: chronological or logical sequence
  • Numerical: in the (first, second, etc.) place, initially, to start with, first of all thirdly, (&c.)  to begin with, at first,  for a start,  secondly,
  • Continuation: subsequently, previously, eventually, next, before (this), afterwards, after (this),  then
  • Conclusion: to conclude (with), as a final point, eventually, at last,  last but not least, in the end,   finally, lastly,
  • Digression: to change the topic, incidentally, by the way,
  • Resumption: to get back to the point, to resume, anyhow, anyway,  at any rate, to return to the subject
  • Summation:  as was previously stated, so,  consequently,  in summary,  all in all, to make a long story short,  thus,  as I have said,  to sum up,  overall,  as has been mentioned,  then,  to summarize, to be brief,  briefly,  given these points,  in all,  on the whole,  therefore,  as has been noted,  hence,   in conclusion,  in a word,  to put it briefly,  in sum,  altogether,  in short,


California State University: http://www.csuci.edu/cis/CIS_Science_Writing_Pilot/helpful-steps.pdf

This is a good example of how to pull various citations together using smooth transitions.

In order to understand best the importance of learning styles in the language classroom, it is first important to provide a definition of what learning styles are. Reid (1995) defines learning style as “an individual’s natural, habitual, and preferred way(s) of absorbing, processing, and retaining new information and skills”. In a similar way, Brown (2000) states that every person has their own natural way to perceive, transform, learn, and possess knowledge and information in their environment. Using a narrower concept, Larsen, Freeman & Long (1991, p. 192) define ‘cognitive style’ as “the preferred way in which learners process information or address a task”. Their definition is limited in that, as will be seen when a classification of learning styles is given (Reid 1995), there are learning styles that do not depend on cognitive processes. Finally, it is important to mention that learning styles will not vary across teaching methods and content areas, they will persist (Reid 1995 and 1998); and, even though they develop gradually in children, they are supposed to be more or less permanent in adults (Brown 2000). It can then be concluded that learning styles are the somewhat permanent ways in which learners perceive, process, and understand the information around them.

Indiana University. http://liberalarts.iupui.edu/uwc/uploads/docs/Lit+Review+weaver-1.pdf

Another great idea is to use a grid. Here is a good example from Indiana University:

Sample Literature Review Grid of Common Points

Research Question: What role does capital punishment play in American society?

Possible Answers: Capital punishment plays the roles of deterrence, revenge, oppression, and political leverage

Author Deterrence Revenge Oppression Political Leverage
Author A
Author B
Author C
Author D


Once you have completed a grid of common points, you can begin writing your paper. When you begin to write the body of the paper, you may want to follow these steps: 1. Select one common point and divide it into sub-topics that represent paragraph size “chunks.”

For example, capital punishment literature on the issue of deterrence has the following sub-topics: (1) the public’s impression that capital punishment does deter crime; (2) researchers’ impressions that capital punishment does not deter crime in most cases; and (3) researchers’ impressions that capital punishment can lead to more crime

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Suck it up, buttercup — Dealing with the IRB

I did some process consulting with a global company and was often at odds with the technology director because what I usually thought (in my technological naiveté) was a quick and reasonable request for an oh-so-minor technology process change quite simply wasn’t. It got to the point where we developed a code for two responses he might have for my technology requests – “Okay” or “Suck it up, buttercup.”

The second response was a quick way of saying “not gonna happen” without having to go through a long explanation of why. We developed a communication trust that said he’d do it if he could but wouldn’t have to explain why if he couldn’t. Or, “suck it up, buttercup.”

Working with the IRB (Institutional Review Board), IEC (Independent Ethics Committee), ERB (Ethical Review Board), ERR (Ethical Research Review Board), REB (Research Ethics Board), RRB (Research Review Board), HRR (Human Research Review Board), or whatever it’s called at your university, made me think of the technology leader and “suck it up, buttercup.” The IRB (what they called it at the University of St. Thomas where I got my doctorate) has power. Reminds me of dealing with my daughter growing up – we can do this the easy way or we can do this the hard way. (She always, always chose the hard way.) Same with the RRB, you can do it the easy way or the hard way.

Here are some tips for the easy way:

  1. Understand the purpose of the IRB. According to Wikipedia (yes, I’m directing you to Wikipedia!), “The purpose of the review process is to assure, both in advance and by periodic review, that appropriate steps are taken to protect the rights and welfare of humans participating as subjects in a research study.” https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Institutional_review_board
  2. Do your homework. Find out at your graduate studies website or in the handbook what you can expect from the RRB. This will tell you how long it takes, what forms you have to fill out (lots and lots of forms), what they do, and the different types of reviews – exempt, expedited (not so much), and full.
  3. Don’t make waves. Sometimes the IRB will suggest something you don’t agree with or something that seems like it shouldn’t be necessary or something just plain stupid. Say it with me now, “Suck it up, buttercup.” A guy I know disagreed with a change the RRB insisted on that was just plain stupid and it put his proposal at the bottom of the pile. His advice to me was “don’t make waves, just make the change and move on.”
  4. Think twice before getting your chair involved. Another tip I wrote focused on protecting your chair. Save your chair for the heavy lifting. Deal with the IRB yourself. However, most chairs will let you know if they think your proposal is ready for the IRB. If they don’t think it is, it isn’t.
  5. Do it right the first time. If you front-end load the proposal (get it super tight from the beginning), it will be easier and faster in the long run to proceed to your research. It’s the back and forth and hurry up and wait that takes the time and drags you down. Make it as perfect as possible before submitting it to your chai
    r, your committee, and the RRB.

FAQs about RRB, IRB, ERB, IEC…

What is the Review Board?

The purpose of any review board is to protect human subjects from harm as they participate in research. It’s that extra little backup that also protects the university. And it helps identify risks that the researcher may have overlooked.

What research has to be submitted to the Review Board?

If it involves human subjects it has to be submitted for review before the research begins.

What is considered “human subjects” research?

Not sure people still say this but, “like, duh.” It’s research that involves human subjects. The definition sometimes goes a little further and says that it’s research that uses human subjects to gather data that adds to the knowledge base of a field.

Why does the [substitute your university name here] require that all human subjects research be approved by the review board?

Everything these days is about risk and managing risk. The review board helps protect the university and researcher.  Oh, and because federal regulations require it.

What are the different types of Review Board approvals?

Many universities have three different kinds of approvals – exempt, expedited, and full review. It usually depends on the research and the risk.

Exempt: Most of the time exempt reviews are for research in educational settings, anonymous surveys, research involving public behavior or things in the public domain, or a review of existing data.

Expedited: This one can fool you. Lots of times what the researcher thinks is a slam dunk expedited proposal differs from what the review board thinks is an expedited proposal. Imagine that. Make sure yours really is an expedited proposal and that it’s not just wishful thinking. If you don’t, it will come back and you’ll have to resubmit everything.

Full review: If the participants are considered vulnerable or part of a protected class (children, prisoners, mentally or physically disabled, or people with HI
V or AIDs) you’ll need a full review.

What do you include with your IRB application?

It doesn’t matter what university you’re with, forms are forms. Use the correct ones. Proofread your submission carefully and proofread it again. Sloppy submissions make the review board think sloppy research.

How long does a review take?

Double whatever your review board website says it takes. Okay, maybe triple it. The tighter your submission the faster you’ll probably get it back. And the fewer changes you’ll have to make. So if the website says it takes 10 business days, they might mean it takes 10 business days from the time of the Review meeting which is held on the first Monday of the month unless that’s a holiday and then it’s held on the second Tuesday of the month unless it’s a term break or summer or whatever.

How long is review board approval good for?

This is a good question. It can vary by university but usually ongoing research has to be reviewed once a year. That means that once you get approval you need to get moving.

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Dissertations are all about physics

Capacity refers to the relative amount of some quantity with respect to another quantity upon which it depends.

The dissertation process is invariably added to a life that is already filled to capacity. In a finite system (capacity), something has to give—actually it turns out a lot of things have to give. Friends in my cohort said they relied on takeout, rarely cleaned (but couldn’t afford cleaning help because they were paying for school), and like the line in the movie Office Space, did the “minimum” in most other areas. They/we asked spouses, friends, family to stick with us because we were sure there was a light at the end of the tunnel.

Centrifugal force is the apparent force that draws a rotating body away from the center of rotation.

If we apply this to a dissertation we could see it as all the forces that draw you (the rotating body) away from working on your dissertation (the center of rotation). Doctoral candidates in my cohort were simultaneously dealing with aging parents, an adoption, the challenges of tweens and teens, becoming first-time grandparents, neglected spouses, and every family scenario in between. And that doesn’t begin to address the forces of work and friends and extended family and ….

Closed system is a physical system on which no outside influences act; closed so that nothing gets in or out of the system and nothing from outside can influence the system’s observable behavior or properties.

Okay, that’s heavy. But that’s what working on a dissertation feels like. It’s a physical system that nothing permeates. The dissertation process may have an ebb and flow but the writer (you) remain closed off from the world. Add to that the forced linear structure of the dissertation (proposal, review, IRB review, changes, approvals, rejections, writing, research, more changes…) and you feel like John Travolta in the one of his first movies, The Boy in the Plastic Bubble. Unlike the movie you don’t break free from the bubble until you’re done and your committee at your defense calls you “doctor.”

Energy is a property associated with a material body. When bodies interact, the energy of one may increase at the expense of the other, and this is sometimes called a transfer of energy.

Applying this to the dissertation process means that, in my opinion anyway, if you’re not careful the dissertation process can sap all your energy leaving you a husk of your former self. (Too much information?) What I found helpful (and others I talked to agreed) is to do the last thing you feel like doing—exercise daily. Not sure there is anything to the whole endorphin thing but oxygen helps—especially if you’re stuck or in a waiting or holding pattern.

Law of inertia says that an object at rest stays at rest and an object in motion stays in motion with the same speed and in the same direction unless acted upon by an unbalanced force.

One simple bit of advice can make the whole dissertation process easier. Do something every day; do not take even a single day off. Even if all you have is 15 minutes or 5 minutes, do something. It will help you stay in motion—and maintain speed and momentum. That’s it.

Kinetic energy is the energy a body has by virtue of its motion. The kinetic energy is the work done by an external force to bring the body from rest to a particular state of motion.

This could vary person to person. For me the kinetic energy was a combination of my chair and my own need to finish. I over-promised things to my chair that I then had to deliver. Others said the outside force was a spouse or a major life event. One woman said she was not losing another summer to her dissertation.

Reaction. Reaction forces are those equal and opposite forces of Newton’s Third Law.

Some places refer to this as absolute uncertainty and relative uncertainty. Gotta love that! The dissertation process can get so involved we don’t even know what we’re certain or uncertain about. And then scientists and physicists who haven’t already been complex enough say there are two kinds of uncertainties—indeterminate and determinate.

Variable. A symbol representative of a set of numbers, points, values, etc. In science, variables represent values of measurements of quantities.

My personal favorite. The variables involved in the dissertation process. Friends. Family. Work. I asked a friend of mine who was working on her dissertation a year before I started mine if she could have coffee sometime. She said not until she was done. She was sorry but it took 100% of her mental and physical and emotional energy to complete the dissertation. All she did was work and work on her dissertation. Then when I got knee deep into my dissertation I knew what she meant. It was all I could do to stay upright let alone take a break and have to try and get the energy back.

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If I had my dissertation to do over…

I asked a random group of people I know pretty well (that’s random as in casual not random as in statistically random!) the question: If you had your dissertation to do over again what would you do differently?

Responses ranged from their relationship with their chair to organization of the process to nuances in the lit review.  In fact, the only thing the responses and respondents had in common is that, to a person, they wouldn’t do it again!

Working with a dissertation chair

Your dissertation chair becomes one of the most important people in your life. People talked about the importance of matching your chair to the methodology, your personality, your topic.

“I would have been more deliberate about choosing a chair for my dissertation. I would have conducted interviews and had a better understanding of how we would connect. I would also have connected with a dissertation coach right away, to help guide my emotions as I had so many other things to do.”

“I would have touched base more frequently with my chair.”

“I would have worked better with my chair. I ended up cutting about 75 pages of what I thought was scintillating content—and could have avoided all of that if I had just checked in with my chair sooner.”

“Choose a realistic, no-nonsense chair.”

The dissertation process

More than anything else, people who have written a dissertation  say they would change things about the process itself.

“I would do a better job on organizing the data from all the articles and readings into a more coherent format.”

“I did a lot of highlighting and flagging on the reading, but felt like I had to go through this a second time to pull together the converging and/or diverging data points. Doing so would have shortened the process. While I was happy with the outcome, for others, it might make a difference on the final product.”

“I would have done it sooner (I was fried from the coursework though so maybe I should have taken off three months and then buckled down). Other advice? Keep it simple (don’t save the world!). Expect that everything will take longer than it should or than you expect. Use an editor earlier.”

“I would make sure I had a realistic time frame. There are many things in the dissertation process that are out of your control and I wasn’t prepared for them (IRB review, changes in the dissertation committee, the workload of the dissertation chair…”

“I would write outside of my home more often…Scheduled dedicated time for writing and stuck to it!”


New doctors talked about all the people involved in the dissertation process—work colleagues, cohort members, spouses (this was a big one), children, parents, and more.

“There’s really nothing I would do differently, however I would
encourage folks to find a research librarian and make him/her their new best friend. This was such a help in my research that I acknowledged 2 librarians by name in my dedication. In fact, I also provided both a signed (by me and all the committee members), bound version of the final product. These two individuals were invaluable – they did alot of the so-called ‘heavy lifting’ at the front end.”

“I would have created a project plan, leveraged my spouse better in the endeavor, selected an advisor better, and used a support network.”

“My mother babysat one day a week for my twins so I could have uninterrupted time to write—and think. I’d still be working on it now without her.”

Topic and methodology

Everyone talks about the importance of having passion for your topic; one person mentioned the importance of having passion for your methodology.

“Our doctoral instructors said from day one that we had to pick a dissertation topic that we were passionate about. That is certainly true. We lived and dreamed this topic for months….in some cases, years. What they did not warn us about is that you should also pick a research methodology that you are passionate about because you will also dream (or have nightmares) about this for months or years. The dissertation process requires you become an expert in your topical area and an expert in a particular research methodology.”


Anything that’s referred to as a terminal degree ends up being personal.

“I wouldn’t beat myself up so much when I didn’t make the progress I expected to make or if I didn’t understand something I knew everyone else was understanding. My chair said that some things just had to percolate; I was thinking more Keurig coffee maker than old fashioned drip grind!”

“Half way through I realized if I took a walk every day, sometimes twice a day, it helped me get back on track and stay sane.”

Dr. Kat

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Pick the right dissertation committee

So you picked the right chair/advisor and things are going swimmingly—right up until you pick the rest of your committee. You think, it’s the chair that matters—I only need bodies for the committee. Wrong. You know those horror stories about dissertation chairs? There are probably again as many about dissertation committees.

Most universities have guidelines for choosing chairs and committees listed on the graduate school website. Here are some examples of chair and committee selection policies:

  • Roles of the Committee Members: [University’s] dissertation supervisory committees are generally composed of three members: a committee chair, a committee member, and a committee university research reviewer (URR). In some rare cases, a fourth, external member may be added to the committee to provide special expertise.
  • The dissertation committee chairperson and at least one committee member must be full-time members of the faculty of [ ] University, holding the rank of professor, associate professor, or assistant professor with an earned doctorate. The chairperson is to come from the student’s program of specialization. Further, in order to ensure a diversity of perspectives during the proposal and dissertation development process, at least one member of the committee must hold professorial appointment in a program different from the student’s program.
  • The committee members shall be chosen from at least two departments, and at least two members shall represent academic specialties that differ from the student’s chosen specialty; one of the committee members must be a tenured [University] faculty member unaffiliated with the student’s home program.

Even with these guidelines you still want to be very careful. The first thing to do is to ask your chair (assuming you have a good working relationship with your chair) for suggestions for other committee members. Once you get some names you can use these questions to help you make your choice. Be nice! Prospective committee members are interviewing you at the same time you’re interviewing them. They might be required to serve on a certain number of committees but it doesn’t necessarily have to be yours!

  1. Do you have time to be on my committee? Ask your chair about the expected time commitment for a committee member. Your university might have this spelled out in a document you can send to a prospective committee member. Tell him/her your schedule and outline their involvement, time commitment.
    One editing client said her committee member forgot to mention she was going to be out of the country for six months—right in the middle of the dissertation proposal stage. Another client told me that a committee member was adopting a baby and said whenever that came through they would be leaving the country and then she wasn’t sure of their schedule. And both times this came up after the proposal stage so it would have set back the dissertation timing by months.

Most institutions have a formal dissertation committee approval – and disapproval – process. What that means is that it’s going to be near impossible to change committee members once they’ve been approved.

  1. What methodology did you use? Which methodologies are you familiar with? Grounded theory? I’ll have to read up on that. Again, my client was told this after they were well into the proposal. And some members might have a pet methodology. Appreciative inquiry anyone?
  2. Are you familiar with/interested in my topic which is ______________? You’ll want to have a solid outline of your topic and even an elevator speech to sell it. One doctoral candidate changed her topic really frosted one committee member who had only agreed to be on the committee because of the topic.
  3. Have you served on other committees? How many? How recently? One doctoral candidate feels she dodged a bullet by asking other advisees about a potential committee member. Three out of three said to find someone else! It was the same complaint for all three – unresponsive, vague, uncommunicative.
  4. My chair is _________. Have you worked with or are you familiar with him/her? What happens if you disagree with my chair or another committee member? This is a huge question so listen carefully to the response.
  5. What kinds of things have you published and where? You can usually get a list from the university website or via a simple google search. Or check amazon.com. Writing style says a lot. So is publishing volume.

More tips for choosing a dissertation committee

  • Personality matters. Find someone whose personality matches yours—or at least doesn’t conflict with yours. You don’t want a “runs with scissors” committee member in a “plays well with others” world. One doctoral candidate said her committee member always second guessed her chair and tried to do end runs on nearly every call. Still another said a committee member contradicted the rest of the committee at every turn.
  • Go with the winners. Check out print copies of dissertations done through your school and this potential committee member. Some places give awards for outstanding dissertations so that’s where I’d start.
  • Pick someone geographically desirable. One woman thought she had secured the perfect third committee member only to find that working remotely wasn’t remotely working! It’s so much easier if all of your committee is in the same city.
  • Stay in your university. Even if it’s not required, it’s best and easiest to work with people from your own university. The only good reason to invite an outside member is if someone has highly specialized expertise; and even then you want to make sure your chair approves.

Dr. Kat

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10 things guaranteed to tick off your dissertation chair

Let’s start with a line from Jerry McGuire. Cuba Gooding Jr.’s character says to Tom Cruise (Jerry McGuire), “Show me the money, Jerry! Show me the money! Dissertation chairs don’t make very much money for being your dissertation chair. One chair said that anyone who does it [act as a dissertation chair] for the money would be better off practicing saying “Would you like fries with that?” The time amortizes to about the same as a counter worker at a fast food restaurant.

So why do they do it? Part of the reason is that it’s often their job. Many universities and colleges require it. Some dissertation chairs do it for the power—they realize they are the only thing in the way of you getting those letters after your name. Too altruistic? The chairs I’ve worked with and talked to are really into it. They say it can be incredibly rewarding. I’ve seen dissertation chairs beam when they describe how proud they are of a new “doctor.”

How do you show appreciation for their time and attention and expertise? Well you don’t do any of these ten things!

  1. Miss deadlines. And this doesn’t mean calling at the last minute to cancel. One chair said she had one person who used to text her to cancel meetings. She did this twice and the chair said she told her if it happened again—if she missed one more deadline—she was dropping her. They can do that. Disrespect their time and you disrespect them.

Hard as it is to believe, your chair has a life outside of your dissertation. It might be the albatross hanging over your head and in your mind 24/7 but it’s not all your chair has going on. You miss a deadline and that has a ripple effect that could blow everything out of the water. One chair told me she provides her schedule upfront along with as much notice as possible when she’s going to be unavailable. She said that missing a deadline for getting a revised chapter to her could mean she can’t look at it for a month.

  1. Try to breeze through the proposal process. The dissertation proposal is as or even more important than the dissertation itself. Here’s why: Only 50% of the people who have completed the doctoral coursework and are ABD ever finish their dissertations and become doctors. But, and this is really important, in my experience 100% of doctoral candidates who get their proposal approved by the RRB or IRB or whatever it’s called at your school, finish. Period. Exclamation point. The proposal is the hard part. A dissertation is what we editors refer to as front-end loaded. The proposal includes chapters 1 through 3 and the references. That’s it. You’re almost there. If your proposal is approved that means you’ve justified the need for your research (chapter 1, introduction); discussed related research (chapter 2, literature review); and covered the research methodology (chapter 3). That’s the real brain work. Now it’s just plain old work. All you have to do is execute the proposal.

So why do a lot of doctoral candidates try to breeze through the proposal so they can get to the actual research? Beats me. I’ve had people say things like “I’ll worry about APA in the actual dissertation.” Or they’ll say, “I’ll put a lot more in my literature review in the final dissertation.” Or, my favorite, “It’s just the proposal, not the real dissertation.” Pretty soon, with this kind of attitude, you significantly add to the people you are ticking off. In addition to your chair and committee, you run the risk of ticking off the entire IRB (and they tend to remember sloppy or incomplete work).

  1. Disregard APA style. This really annoys chairs. Even worse, some chairs have told me they equate sloppy APA style with sloppy research. They can’t see the content (the forest) for the disregard for APA style (the trees).

And it’s not like you haven’t been hearing about APA style since you began your doctoral studies. Here’s an idea: Ask your chair what their APA style mistake pet peeve is (okay, holy bad sentence construction, Batman). This lets them know that you are aware of the need to use APA style and care enough to find out what especially matters to them.

I’ve found that what makes one chair crazy doesn’t phase another. And vice versa. One chair said he hates it when tables have vertical lines in them. It only takes a second to go to Purdue Owl (https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/560/19/) and copy the example shown.  Another chair said it’s the seriation thing. Put a comma before the “and” in a serial statement. (In order of importance, chairs say it’s seriation, improper use of headings, and vertical lines in figures or tables that make them crazy.)

  1. Disregard your school’s style guidelines. When I’m working on editing a dissertation and someone sends me their school’s dissertation writing guidelines I know I’m in for a treat. The fact that they even know their school has guidelines (usually in addition to APA guidelines) is a good sign. It usually means the APA and style rules have been followed so I get to focus on the meat (the content) instead of having to make several passes just to fix the style mistakes. That costs more and increases the likelihood I might miss something important in the content.

It’s also a good idea to introduce yourself, even virtually, to the head of the writing center. You could ask him or her for writing tips, an opinion of the best resources, and even for insights for working with your chair or department. Writing center resources remind me of librarians and library resources—I’m amazed at their resourcefulness and selflessness. Be respectful of their time. Say you have a question or a couple questions and ask what would be a good time to contact them and how they prefer to be contacted. If someone really goes out of their way for you it doesn’t hurt to acknowledge them (probably not by name) on the school’s website or in your favorite social media. “Got some great insights from the graduate studies librarians. What an untapped resource.”

  1. Disregard your chair’s comments. Most chairs use track changes and comments. Track changes are changes you can accept or reject. Comments take a little longer. Whether you disagree or agree with the comment you should keep their comment and insert your response below. “I agree with your concerns about the dearth of research in this area and I inserted additional sources to support the statement.” Ask your chair before you get started how they will use track changes and comments.

In a previous blog I said I wouldn’t work with a chair who doesn’t use track changes or insert comments electronically. No one’s memory is that good. What I’ve seen and what I’ve heard indicates a correlation (gotta love the research talk!) between a smooth dissertation process and the use of track changes and electronic comments. That doesn’t mean you never talk with your chair, it just means you can maintain version control and keep moving forward. One woman said her first chair (she ended up changing chairs) preferred to meet in person and use handwritten notes because it was more “organic.” Took all of my control not to expel the coffee I was drinking through my nose. Seriously…are you kidding me? It’s a dissertation and this is a university not a Whole Foods!

  1. Expect your chair to edit your dissertation. Your chair is your chair. His or her responsibility is, well, I’m not exactly sure what his or her responsibility is. You should ask at the start how he or she sees their (you can’t go from singular to plural in APA but I’m doing it here—so there!) role and how the university sees their role. I did a google search for contract with dissertation chair and got over 2 million hits. Turns out a lot of universities have contracts that spell out the role of the chair and student, how often they’re going to meet, who does what, overall responsibilities, and more. Who knew! One thing they all have in common however (I did a random search—not random as spelled out in the research methodology sense….) is that no one expects the chair to function as a
    n editor.

Sometimes a chair will recommend you work with an editor. In my experience they don’t make this recommendation lightly. If they make this recommendation in the early stages it’s usually because they can’t get through the content because of the writing—and they’re usually not talking APA.

  1. Expect your chair to read your mind. If something is going on that affects your dissertation or timing or quality of content or just about anything else involved in your research you owe it to your chair to bring them in on it. One woman told me she was getting a divorce and would have to put her dissertation on hold while she made some related life changes. She didn’t want to tell her chair because she was afraid he’d drop her and she liked working with him.

Another person told me he was having trouble vetting his survey instrument and wanted to see what he could work out on his own before involving his chair. Another bad idea. Still another said she heard a rumor that her chair was leaving for another university. You can ask if it’s true. Maybe he or she can’t say anything but most chairs have a lot of integrity and will make sure they hand you over to someone else if they leave. Sometimes, depending on school policies (and if they’re going to a competitor!), the chair can continue to act as your chair.

One woman told me she needed help with statistical analysis but was afraid to let on how weak she felt in that area. Most chairs know people who can help in this area and know the school policies for getting this kind of help. Take advantage of their help early.

  1. Expect your chair to translate your dissertation. If you speak English as a second language, most likely you’ve encountered writing issues in your coursework. At the dissertation stage, however, no one’s going to cut you any slack. They can’t. The chair and committee and IRB and the university itself has to sign off on your dissertation so it has to be in perfect English. You might want to hire an editor (not the same as a dissertation editor) to work with you on an ongoing basis during the proposal and dissertation process. You might want to run everything past your editor/proofreader before you send it to your chair and build that into the timing so you don’t miss deadlines.
  2. Have attitude. I’ve seen a lot of things in my time editing dissertations but the thing that totally stumps me is when I see arrogance or attitude. I simply don’t get that. Here is someone who is giving their time and energy and expertise (for very little monetary return) and the doctoral candidate (notice I didn’t say doctor) has attitude. The way I see it, you need them more than they need you. Attitude isn’t going to help. On the other hand, a good attitude is often all it takes to get them on your side. There’s a quote by Frank Lloyd Wright in which he says, “Early in life I had to choose between honest arrogance and hypocritical humility. I chose the former and have seen no reason to change.” Only problem is that it’s Frank Lloyd Wright. He has earned the right to be arrogant. I can’t think of one doctoral candidate who has.
  3. Don’t mention your chair in the acknowledgements. No one I talked to came out and said this but they do expect a “shout out” after all the time they put in. One woman I worked with had a nasty, patronizing, dismissive, and arrogant chair. She finally got through it, was about to send the dissertation to her committee pre-defense, and happened to mention she had received one snarky email too many and was removing his name from the acknowledgements. (She said she was replacing his name with her dog’s who had been a lot more understanding throughout the process.) My response was, well it was almost unprintable. I took a deep breath and said something professional like, “Are you out of your mind? He still has to sign it and you have to get through the defense and your other committee members will notice the slight and…” Think all caps for my rant. The dissertation chair says “jump” and you say “how high?” They are holding all the power. You are a lowly doctoral candidate who, without your chair, could be putting ABD instead of PhD behind your name for the rest of your life. Suck it up. Put their name in the acknowledgements with appropriate phrasing that says “you couldn’t have done it without them.”

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